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Drum Major Application Essay

As of Fall 2018, UT-Austin requires that first-time freshman write 250-300 words submitted directly on the Apply Texas website to answer the question, "How do you show leadership in your life? How do you see yourself being a leader at UT Austin?"

Consider incoporating a few of these approaches into your Leadership short answer essay.

1. Take a broad definition of leadership

Leadership can mean whatever you want it to. UT is giving you an opportunity to discuss something that interests and is important to you. Relate an activity or two that highlights some of your best characteristics or personal traits like determination, active listening, taking responsibility on sports teams and group projects, or how you help others.

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2. Are you introverted? That's okay!

Not every student can be the drum major, team captain, or student body president, and that's okay. There are ways to lead that don't show up on a resume or competition.

Are you the person in your group of friends who helps resolve conflicts? Do you listen well and offer constructive advice when your friends and family confront an obstacle? Are you instrumental on a larger team where your contributions are critical but not obvious?

Consider discussing your responsibilities at home or with younger siblings.

3. Cite specific examples to back up your points

In all of your essays, you should avoid empty statements and cliches. You need to provide evidence for your characteristics and personality traits. Many times students write things like "I am a strong leader who always puts forward their best effort." Great! Then provide an example or share a story that provides evidence.

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College essays are a series of arguments. All good arguments need thoughtful evidence. Don't write your short answers without supporting your points.

4. If you are referencing a few examples, develop each activity fully

It's okay to cite three or four different examples rather than spending 300 words writing about one activity. Nevertheless, you should spend at least a few sentences discussing each one. Ping-ponging between activities often leaves your short answer looking like bullet points on a resume more than a fully formed thought. 

5. Tie your leadership activity into your first-choice major

Admissions reviewers want to know how you will be a future leader on the Forty Acres. If you have an activity or tie that ties into your first-choice major, talk about it!

Leadership doesn't necessarily mean participating in college organizations or extracurricular activities. It can also mean contributing to classroom discussions, conducting research, or studying abroad.

It's also okay to say that you don't want to continue participating in the exact same activities you did in high school - few college students end up doing this. It is important to consider what future activities, resources, or organizations may interest you.

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6. Leading can also mean following

Discuss a time you were integral to a group project or service activity but not necessarily the one in charge. Not every competitive applicant will have traditional leadership activities. I suspect one reason UT created this essay is to allow students to provide context to their resume or discuss something that doesn't fit neatly into the Apply Texas activity boxes. 

It's okay to say "I'm not a typical leader, but I am really important to my group/team/family." I've even seen one particularly clever essay how they are the primary caretaker for their family's five cats and dogs. They argued it's practically a part time job since their siblings are too young and their parents are busy, and I believe them.

7. Expand upon your Essay A

Ultimately, your three short answers and Essay A should compliment one another. No essay is more important than the other because reviewers are scoring you on a scale of 1-6. Ideally, your application should read like one long narrative where each prompt allows you to portray different aspects of your identity.

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If you're stuck on how to answer the leadership question, discuss what roles and responsibilities you have at home or in your community. Since there are any number of ways to approach Essay A, you can use your leadership short answer to compliment your discussion of the environment in which you are raised.

8. Discuss why UT is the best fit for you

Identify specific UT service organizations, fraternities and sororities, or cultural organizationsand why they interests you. UT has a list of all of their organizations that you can browse.

If your essay reads generically, "I look forward to all of UT's resources and living in a great city like Austin" then make it more specific and concrete. These short answers aren't a contract, and if you say you're interested in a few opportunities yet change your mind when you arrive on campus, that's okay.

You should still demonstrate that you are making an informed decision by applying to UT and how you can bring diverse perspective to UT's campus and classroom.

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Ah, college application essays – the necessary evil of college-bound high school seniors everywhere. If you’ve just finished your junior year of high school, then these may very well be in your near future.

Since Thomas and Martin have been doing a series of podcast episodes about how to get into college, I thought it would be appropriate to write up an article about how to write a college application essay – one that stands out and that makes a great impression.

Maybe you’re thinking,

“Crap, how do I even write this kind of essay?”

Don’t worry. I was in your same position four years ago, and I learned a lot through both my own college application process and through my subsequent years as an English major who wields commas like shurikens.

Today I’ll share some of that knowledge and teach you how you can craft an essay that really bolsters your overall application.

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Why Your College Essay Matters

When you’re juggling transcripts, forms, dates, and everything else, it’s easy to brush off the college application essay as “just another part of the application.”

However, while it’s true that the essay isn’t the only thing that matters to college admissions officers, a great essay can actually compensate for less than stellar grades. On the flip side, a bad essay can overshadow all of your other accomplishments.

In general, it’s the only part of the application where you have the opportunity to show the college who you really are. Most of the other parts of the application are just lists and statistics: GPA, courses taken, a list of extracurriculars, maybe some work or volunteer experience. This stuff matters…but it doesn’t make you special.

This is especially important to note if you’re aiming to attend a very competitive school – everyone applying is going to have a high GPA, a laundry list of advanced classes, and will have been president of every student organization since the dawn of mankind. Also, some of them will secretly be robots.

So treat a college application essay as a tool for standing out in ways the robots can’t. It’s a lot like the cover letter you write when applying for a job – it’s your chance to reveal the person behind the accomplishments and statistics.

Even if you’re only applying to a couple schools that you know you can get into, it will still serve you well to write a compelling admissions essay. Standing out from everyone else could put you in the running for additional scholarships and will also simply make a good impression, which never hurts.

How to Pick the Right Essay Topic

It’s impossible to write an article covering every possible essay prompt you could encounter in the college application process. Just within the U.S., the types of questions vary somewhat among different schools – to say nothing of what you might encounter at schools in other countries.

There are some general commonalities, though. For some good examples, here are the five questions from this year’s Common Application (a kind of “master application” accepted by many U.S. colleges and universities):

  1. Some students have a background, identity, interest, or talent that is so meaningful they believe their application would be incomplete without it. If this sounds like you, then please share your story.
  2. The lessons we take from failure can be fundamental to later success. Recount an incident or time when you experienced failure. How did it affect you, and what did you learn from the experience?
  3. Reflect on a time when you challenged a belief or idea. What prompted you to act? Would you make the same decision again?
  4. Describe a problem you’ve solved or a problem you’d like to solve. It can be an intellectual challenge, a research query, an ethical dilemma-anything that is of personal importance, no matter the scale. Explain its significance to you and what steps you took or could be taken to identify a solution.
  5. Discuss an accomplishment or event, formal or informal, that marked your transition from childhood to adulthood within your culture, community, or family.

As you can see, these questions are all very open-ended. And they’re supposed to be. Colleges want to give you as much freedom as possible to show them who you are. The prompts are just supposed to be starting points.

That said, you can set yourself up for success from the start by choosing a topic that lets you show your strengths. Don’t pick a prompt just because you think answering it will make you sound “impressive.” This quote by former Stanford University Dean of Admissions Robin Mamlet focuses on course selection, but it applies perfectly to essays as well:

“Colleges want to see a student who studies French because he adores French, not a student who studies Chinese because she’s been told it looks better to an admissions office.”

Trust me, colleges don’t care which question you answer. It’s how you answer it that matters.

Whatever application process you’re going through, you’ll likely have a choice of several questions. Don’t get overwhelmed trying to pick the right one. My suggestion is to just read through them and narrow down to one or two that really speak to you.

From there, get out a piece of paper and start brainstorming ideas for each. At this point, nothing is off the table. Put down anything you can think of that might work as an essay. The more ideas, the better, as you often find your best ideas only after getting the obvious ones out of the way.

What NOT to Write About

Speaking of obvious ideas, the biggest piece of advice I can give about writing college essays is this: avoid the obvious. There are so many ways to succeed at these essays, so long as you keep your approach interesting. And the best way to be interesting is to avoid boring, overused answers that admissions officers will have read literally thousands of times.

Here are a few things to avoid writing about:

  1. That time you really “grew as a person.”
  2. How you met your current boyfriend or girlfriend.
  3. Anything that comes across as narcissistic.
  4. Anything…creepy. I’m not sure how else to put this, but there are some things best left unshared in your college app.
  5. Anything full of superlatives (it was the best day of my life, it was the most awesome thing I’ve ever done, etc.)
  6. Most of all, anything trite.

Really, the success of your essay will come down not to what you write about, but how. In general, it’s much easier to stand out on the basis of how you approach your topic than what you say.

For the most part, it’s unlikely that you’ve experienced anything extremely uncommon in the relatively short amount of time you’ve been a human. Most high school students lead lives that don’t deviate too far from the norm – except that one quiet guy in your class who sits next to the window near the back. He’s almost certainly either a genius mech pilot or the subject of some prophecy in an alternate dimension that he’ll be transported to.

Now, it’s certainly possible that you happen to be that guy, and I definitely encourage you to highlight any uncommon experience you’ve had on your essay. For instance, if you’ve climbed Mt. Everest or visited space or helped cure a rare disease, then yeah, you should probably mention that at some point.

However, most people don’t have such novel experiences. And that’s just fine. Don’t think that your life is too “boring” to provide material for a great essay. With the right approach, you can still write an essay that wows.

What the Heck Should I Write About?

Okay, so we’ve covered what to avoid. But what in the world should you talk about?

As I mentioned before, it’s best to start with brainstorming. Once you’ve followed the process I described and have a list of, say, 10-15 topics, I recommend doing a bit of free writing for each.

If you’ve never done it before, free writing is just taking a topic and writing anything that comes into your head. Just take a blank document or sheet of paper, set a timer for 10-15 minutes, and start writing.

The point of this exercise is twofold:

  1. It helps you get all the obvious stuff out of your head first. When you begin to write an essay, it’s normal to fall back on clichés. That’s okay to start – it gets you in the flow of writing. But we want to get that stuff out of the way as quickly as possible so we can move on to the not so obvious.
  2. When free writing about a topic, you may stumble onto an idea even better than your original. For instance, you might start by thinking you’re writing an essay about how marching band taught you the value of hard work…only to realize halfway through writing it that what it really taught you was the importance of committing yourself wholeheartedly to a goal and following through on it.

If you’re really stuck even coming up with topics to brainstorm and free write, here are some general categories of things to get you started:

  1. Sports you’ve played.
  2. Clubs you’ve belonged to (or, better yet, started).
  3. Organizations you’ve been a part of.
  4. Volunteer work you’ve done.
  5. Notable accomplishments (for instance, creating your own personal website or blog).
  6. Notable experiences (traveling to the North Pole, doing a homestay in another country, meeting the President).
  7. Notable abilities (fluency in multiple languages, wilderness survival skills, Iron Chef-level cooking abilities).

These are all jumping off points for the essay. They’ll get you started, but simply writing about these things alone isn’t enough. More work needs to be done in order to craft an essay that makes you truly stand out. 

To do that, you’ll first want to avoid making some common mistakes.

How to Avoid the Biggest Essay-Writing Mistakes

The two biggest mistakes that most students make when writing a college app essay are:

  1. Being too vague.
  2. Focusing on events instead of feelings.

Let’s look at both of these issues in more detail, and then cover some ways of fixing them.

Big Mistake #1: Being Too Vague

“Detail makes the difference between boring and terrific writing. It’s the difference between a pencil sketch and a lush oil painting. As a writer, words are your paint. Use all the colors.” – Rhys Alexander

Vagueness isn’t a problem unique to admissions essays. It’s something all writers struggle with – including myself; I struggled with it while writing this very article.

So why do we have a tendency to write vaguely? I believe the main cause of the problem is that there’s a disconnect between what we know in our heads and what we put down on paper.

With all the knowledge you have of a topic, it can seem that a few simple sentences are enough to do it justice – but that’s rarely the case. You have to remember that the person reading your essay knows nothing about you, save for a few basic statistics.

Furthermore, they likely know nothing about the subject of your essay. Even if they do, they certainly don’t have the same knowledge and perspective that you have. To close this gap, you need to be as specific as possible.

Here’s an example. Let’s say you’ve decided to write about your time in high school marching band; specifically, you’re recounting the first time your performed with the band in front of a crowd (I use this example because it’s something I’m personally familiar with).

Here’s what a first attempt at describing this might look like:

The first time I marched in front of a crowd, I was so nervous. We got into formation, took the field, and began to play. It was all a blur, and before I knew it, it was over. As I walked off the field after that first performance, I felt prouder than I ever had.

It’s not bad – it sets the scene and tells a story, and it even includes some emotional language. But it could be way more specific.

Here’s another version of the same idea, only this time it’s more focused and detailed:

The first time I marched in front of a crowd, I was so nervous that I could barely hold up my saxophone. As we stood there on the football field ready to begin, I looked up into the stands and noticed for the first time how huge the crowd was. So many eyes on me. What if I screwed up? Before I had time to think, though, I saw the drum major take the stand and give the signal. I brought my instrument to my lips and did everything just as we had rehearsed. I didn’t even have to think – I just knew what to do. The next five minutes were a blur. After the last note had faded, we turned in formation and marched off the field. Leaving the field that day was the first time I realized the power of devoting everything I had to a goal and following through.

See the difference? This second version isn’t going to win any awards, and it definitely needs more work, but the specificity is there. Note all the details. If the person reading this essay had no idea about marching band or music, this description would give them enough detail to empathize with the writer.

A good rule of thumb is this: write what you think is enough detail…and then write twice as much. The right amount is probably somewhere between the two.

Big Mistake #2: Events vs. Feelings

“Just the facts, ma’am.”

Now we’ve arrived at the second common mistake: describing events instead of feelings. Many admissions essays focus too much on what happened and not enough on how it made you feel and what you learned from it.

Remember, you’re not Sergeant Joe Friday writing up a police report. You’re not writing a newspaper article. And you’re certainly not telling your story just for the heck of it. You’re trying to show who you are and what you’re about.

To do this, you need to get away from simply summarizing events. For instance, let’s say you spent a summer during your high school years doing a homestay in another country while learning a new language.

When writing about an experience like this, it can be really easy to get wrapped up in all the cool things that happened. But you can’t forget to talk about what matters. You need to talk about what you learned, about how this experience changed you, and how it helped form who you are today.

Talking about your feelings and the lessons you’ve learned is hard. Especially in a way that doesn’t sound cliche. Once again, the key is to be specific.

Want some examples? John Hopkins University has a page full of essays that worked; one in particular, entitled “Breaking Into Cars”, showcases what the writer learned from his experiences well.

On a more technical note, the individual words you use can make or break your essay. This could be the subject of an entire blog post – which would probably put anyone who doesn’t share my interest in arcane things like subordinate clauses and intransitive verbs right to sleep. So, to keep this section short, here’s a quick list of words I think you should avoid:

  1. Happy
  2. Sad
  3. Amazing
  4. Good
  5. Great
  6. Awesome

These are just filler words that we lean on for convenience. To craft an outstanding essay you have to get past these overused descriptions.

Final Tips

“So the writer who breeds more words than he needs, is making a chore for the reader who reads.”

– Dr. Seuss

To round this article off, here are a few additional pieces of advice for writing a successful admissions essay:

  1. Proofread, proofread, proofread. Sadly, one of the easiest ways to stand out is to have correct spelling and grammar. Don’t let stupid mistakes pull down the quality of your essay. Proofread this thing more than any essay you’ve ever written.
  2. Edit, edit, edit. After you’ve checked for mechanical errors, you need to go back through your essay and edit it. Look for things like consistency of tone, style, and form. Does the way the essay is organized make sense? What could be clearer? What do you need to add? What should you cut? If you need some help, check out this guide from Purdue.
  3. Get a second, third, and even fourth opinion. Once you’ve proofread and edited the essay till you’re sick of it, let a few people you trust look over it. Anyone who knows about writing will do. If they’re willing, get one of your English teachers to read it. These people will point out things you never would have noticed on your own.
  4. DO NOT PROCRASTINATE. Look, we all procrastinate. It’s part of human nature. But please, please, please do not not procrastinate on your admissions essay. Everything I’ve covered in this article matters only if you give yourself enough time. If you start the day before the application is due, all I can say is good luck.
  5. Relax. You can do this. The college application process is stressful, and the essay can seem like an insurmountable hurdle. But you can do it! You’re going to be fine.

Conclusion

I hope that after reading this post you feel a bit more confident in your ability to write your college admissions essay. It may feel scary and impossible, but with right approach (and enough time), you can write an essay that showcases your unique personality and impresses admissions officers.

What questions do you have about writing college admissions essays? If you’re already in college, do you have any advice for current high schoolers? Share your thoughts in the comments section below, or post about it in the College Info Geek Community.

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